The Lord's Prayer

In an effort to better understand the Lord's Prayer I decided to re-write it in my own words.  Not because I could improve on the original, but in order to make the prayer more my own.  If you get a chance to read it I'd love to hear what you think.  I'd love it even more if you could make your own version and share it with me.

Dad (my better one) you are both different from us and better than us.  We ask that you continue to be different from us and better than us.  Bring to our world your way of doing things: your morality, your community, your politics, and your love.  Just as you live in loving, differentiated union (Father, Son, and Spirit) make all relationships on earth meet this standard.  Give us everything we really need, including the forgiveness that we often think we don't.  Give us this forgiveness after we have forgiven others.  Help us to keep from hurting ourselves and others. Keep us safe from what is harmful.  We ask this because we know you are the source of all that is just, powerful, and beautiful.  Amen.